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I feel you lay your head
Against my chest
Listening to my heartbeat
As we begin to rest
I listen and I close my eyes
Because I can feel your heart, too
A smile spreads across my face
There's something I want to tell you
Your eyes sparkle
When I see you look at me
My heart suddenly beats faster
And I think, is this a reality?
Our hearts beat together
Our breath the same, too
Darling, I could stay here forever
Just to say I love you
Against my chest
Listening to my heartbeat
As we begin to rest
I listen and I close my eyes
Because I can feel your heart, too
A smile spreads across my face
There's something I want to tell you
Your eyes sparkle
When I see you look at me
My heart suddenly beats faster
And I think, is this a reality?
Our hearts beat together
Our breath the same, too
Darling, I could stay here forever
Just to say I love you
Just another memory. 
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OMG. this is the neetliest love poetry if have read in a LONG time.
Beautiful.
Beautiful.